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《你的夜晚是否与我的夜晚一样》2nJ
    （原作：乡村歌手）2nJ
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  黑夜在黑夜里流淌2nJ
  栖息的鸟群2nJ
  什么时候掠过清寂的村庄2nJ
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  你简单的背影是我唯一的风景2nJ
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  你的夜晚是否与我的夜晚一样2nJ
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  夜色孤寂，在沉睡的梦里流动2nJ
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  所有的情绪2nJ
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  你的夜晚是否与我的夜晚一样2nJ
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Is Your Night the Same As Mine2nJ
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Dark flowed through the night,2nJ
When? Did the resting birds,2nJ
Flight over the quiet villa,2nJ
An empty villa in theseason of Cape Jasmine.2nJ
The figure of your back was the only scene in my view,2nJ
Together with the sound of a clock on my desk,2nJ
Stayed in my memory forever.2nJ
Was your night the same as mine?2nJ
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Many times in the life, joys from sufferings,2nJ
And sufferings from joys,2nJ
Rising high,2nJ
With the music of a flute, played in the night.2nJ
Windy evenings on the ancient bank,2nJ
Skirt fluttering, you stride along the Jia-Ling River. 2nJ
The full moon on the river,2nJ
Shining on my heart with lovesick.2nJ
Is your night the same as mine?2nJ
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The light of lonely night, drifting in the sounded sleep,2nJ
My night, as lonely as the bamboo in Ban-Qiao’s painting,2nJ
As sad as the tears of flowers in Du-Fu’s poem.2nJ
Tell me, can tears of heart ever wet the flimsy night?2nJ
All the thoughts,2nJ
Hiding in you faint breaths,2nJ
Warm and sweet, as that of a flower,2nJ
Penetrating the dark night,2nJ
Will your night be the same as mine?2nJ
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    ----- First Draft: Jun 02, 20042nJ

(原作者点评: 我的朋友outtowner把我的这首诗翻译了一下，我个人觉得翻译的非常好！他的翻译使我感动．他的译作在节奏上与原作达到了和谐一致．还有音步上注重了诗歌本身的内在旋律，使其更具有音乐性．从而丰富了原作．尤其是最后一节的译文，能从实际出发，非常细腻地用英语来表达原作中的simile,无论是visual image,还是auditory image ,and kinaesthetic image都用得非常平缓而柔和，他的译文实际上在原文的基础上进行了再创造，从而弥补了原作的缺陷．

　　实际上翻译就是再创造，但诗歌的翻译尤其是中国诗歌的翻译是一个很艰难的过程．这是因为中国诗歌的情绪尤其是语言表达与英文有很大的不同．外语大都是结构性语言，不象中文那样富于情感和意象化，比如说＂波光粼粼＂，可能我们可以翻译出＂波光＂但无法翻译出＂粼粼＂．但很多翻译者，在翻译诗歌的时候常常把诗歌的意境翻译出来，与原文大相径庭，这样也使翻译走如了另一个极端，也违背的翻译的基本原则.)

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